Forget The Message. Just Send Money!
“The most poorly written mail I get is from people who want my money.”
–January 26 post signed by “Disgruntled Writer”
The lesson I’ve learned in 40 years as a copywriter is this: Even if only 50% of your clients can read, you can be absolutely certain that 100% of them are convinced they can write!
No wonder that Nancy Schwartz’ recent survey of 900 nonprofit leaders found that “86% of the organizations characterize their messages as difficult to remember …that nonprofit messages don’t connect strongly…and that inconsistency reigns, leaving confusion and annoyance in its path.”
Knowing “Who” to approach is clearly the most essential ingredient in the fundraiser’s recipe for success. But knowing “What”—what message, what positioning, what offer, what relationship hot buttons, and even what adjectives to employ—can make the difference between just so-so and terrific results.
The biggest mistake – bar none – that executive directors, boards, program specialists and, yes, most fundraisers make is thinking that all that policy ho-ha, detailed technical descriptions of the most boring sort, and self-congratulatory organizational chest-beating is important. NOT!
While I’m grateful that clients trusted and rewarded my wordsmithing enough to put the kids through college, I have no illusions that they hung on my every word. Not when I think of all the editing-by-committee sessions, all the “you really don’t understand the substantive nature of our work” condescension, not to mention the near-daily schoolmarmish reminder that ending sentences with prepositions is something up with which we will not put.
In today’s world, the once-honored copywriter now plays a definite second or even third fiddle to the exalted data analyst. I say “exalted” because why else would organizations spend millions on expert segmentation and modeling advice to find the “Who” and then virtually ignore the essential “What” of messaging?
This is what I find frightening: the nonprofit community spends millions of dollars testing lists, enhancing data, and modeling and analysis to the point of paralysis. Yet we invest mere nickels and dimes (if that!) on research involving messaging, the strengths and weaknesses of the case for support, and in understanding the all important factors that make up donor satisfaction and loyalty.
To paraphrase Tom’s and my mentor, John W. Gardner, the founder of Common Cause: The nonprofit which ignores investment and research in messaging and positioning, while engaging in analysis to the point of paralysis, will have neither good messaging nor useful analysis: neither its appeals nor its segments will produce winning results.
So ask yourself: When’s the last time our organization did any serious research around “What” we are saying to our donors and prospects? What significant steps are we taking to determine the most effective messages and positioning for our campaigns and programs? Do we really understand the most important issues, concerns and trust factors among our donors and prospects? Do we know which giving opportunities appeal to different types of donors and why?
So many questions. So few answers. In future posts we’ll share with you some of the effective new research tools we’ve developed over at DonorTrends.
Even if your message and positioning research budget is non-existent, there’s plenty of good, proven advice out there from veteran message mavens.
For those suffering from organization-centric messaging there’s no more effective and simple advice than that of Jerry Huntsinger:
…”Sell the tears, not the statistics.
… Sell the sickness, not the cure.
… Sell the problem, not the mission statement.”
For those frightened or puzzled by adjectives read “Adjectives 101” … a short, to the point piece by Deborah Block and Paul Karps appearing in the latest issue of Mal Warwick’s Newsletter.
For those who want to put some real method in your direct mail testing, the “Secrets of Direct Mail Testing” is an inexpensive must-have guide.
Finally… for a real, live, recent case statement on the importance of properly tying the “Who” to the “What”, learn about the successful second gift strategy of the National Wildlife Federation in yesterday’s Fundraising Success Magazine.
Now that you’re on the track of the right audience (Who), the right message and offer (What), tomorrow I’ll explore the right time (When) and tell you why I think it’s time to mount the barricades.
Roger
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I’ve always loved what the great copywriter Hank Burnett once told me about effective direct mail copy, “Don’t tell them about your grass seed, write them about their lawn.”
Roger one of the best posts yet … and a reminder of sometimes what we forget!
Fantastic take on this challenge, Agitators. Thanks.
Roger,
You left out a key element of copywriting. Not just to sell the problem, the need, but to create targeted emails and letters to people who give for different reasons.
It’s easy to appear hamfisted to a donor who is business-minded, if, for example, you write a heartfelt plea for support using a story from a family in need. A business minded donor will understand numbers, not stories. Know thy donors, and mark them with custom fields in your database. I have a little slideshow presentation about the different kinds of donors which you might be amused by.
http://www.wildwomanfundraising.com/whats-your-donor-personality/
So, are you a communitarian? A devout? A socialite? Why do YOU give?
Are you making sure that your donor communications are tailored to different reasons for giving, or do you assume that everyone is like you?
This is fantastic. Copywriting 101. Can I excerpt some of this for The Ranch?
Roger,
Unfortunately, I never read this issue of Agitator three weeks back; but, I always save them and try to go back later and take a look. I’m happy I saved this one!
I could not agree more with what you had to say in this posting. Just a terrific retelling of the “gospel” according to all of the best direct-mail copywriters (particularly for nonprofit fundraising).
This subject struck a really deep chord for me and brought back a flood of memories of my “childhood” days in direct-mail fundraising. It served to remind me that some truths are tested and tested and always reproved to be truth!
Back in the late 70s, when I was development/PR director for an Easter Seals state chapter and cutting my teeth on direct-mail fundraising on a much larger scale, I had the good fortune to work with Alan Sack at Hub Mail in Boston. We had planned to build the annual Easter Seal spring appeal in one of those years around the state’s television weather forecasters. The strategy included an offer and a challenge, and it was integrated with the annual, national telethon.
We all thought we had a winning strategy and formula, as well as a fantastic mailing package, but we decided to submit the entire program to the rigors of some consumer-opinion research. We engaged a research firm and conducted some focus groups and test mailings. Good thing we did!
As marvelous as we thought our entire program was, the research exercise resulted in some important changes and adjustments to everything — the general strategy, the mailing package, and even our planned roles for the weather guys. Some of it was amazing to us, because we thought we had the best in expert talent and know-how putting the program together.
What we learned was that it’s still different to be standing in the donor’s or prospect’s shoes! In the end, the research results and the changes and adjustments were validated, because the campaign was an enormous success. And it was successful not only from the standpoint of overall response, dollars raised and new donors acquired, it also garnered major media coverage and exposure for the state’s Easter Seal movement that year.
Thanks for stressing the “What” piece of direct-mail fundraising. And, the more I think about it, the more I’m reminded that the “What” component is critically important in all fundraising methodologies and initiatives. Otherwise, we wind up being mystified by the prevailing vagaries of donor loyalty and the “analysis paralysis” you describe ends up being a chronic ailment!